anzac writing

the walt

use descriptive  language

we had to do and use atribbute chart 

we were writing about this is because Ms Wilton  read  to us a book called the anzac violin by  jennifer beck 

Woah that hurts i dont think that i remember everything what happened the explosives you keep on throwing them and you killed heaps of people and some people were scattered with limbs it was pretty gross and are you deaf a little what what i can't hear you ok your deaf the reason why he is deaf is because when he threw way to much explosives and it was really loud so your deaf well but do you still know anything you saw at the war well i remember seeing dead army people lying on the floor dead and some other people covered with rocks and shooting threw a little hole it was also freezing and so foggy ok what did you hear i heard the explosives i threw tanks coming for atack and blood dripping from me its because you got shot over three times then you fell over then none shot you because they thought you were dead then the medical service came and check on everyone see if there dead but you will still breathing and now your here .Hello ok you're awake good i just wanna ask you was there anything else you remember well i do rememeber me getting bashed on to the the ground as hard as possible then my hands really got numb then when i try shoot the gun it keep on missing then i was getting pushed around by some of the soilders

this diary is just like creative so my picture in my head and hopefuly you will get the same picture in my head

i enjoyed writing it was fun i was like this will be cool and in my head on what it looked like i was like yea this is the one so i writed the stuff in my head and put it on a doc and post on my blog

i found hard was how was i going to start

thank you bye